Personal Statements - Essays
- Grammatical rules
- Sought Characteristics
- Sample Personal Statements (for medical school)
- Sample Personal Statements (for podiatric and optometric school)
Personal Statement: Sometimes referred to as the “statement of purpose” or “personal essay,” is your opportunity to state who you are, where you come from, what you are passionate about, how you ended up at your current career choice, and where you want to go in the future. You must tell the reader why you are pursuing a career in _________ and what you are passionate about.
Essays: Many health schools also have secondary/supplementary applications on top of the general application you fill out. These secondary applications usually include specific long-answer essays. Many of the pointers on this page will apply not only to the personal essay, but to the long-answer essays you will find on these secondary applications.
What do Admissions Committee Members Look for in the Statement?
Admissions Committee members, when they read your personal statement, will be looking mainly at style and content. Remember, they will read countless applications and essays in a short time and, as a result, many of the admissions readers will skim personal statements. Consequently, you need to be concise in what you say and not repeat yourself throughout the essay. You should try to use key words and action verbs throughout your statement. Also, you should try to capture the reader’s attention by describing any out-of-the-ordinary or interesting experiences you have had, provide insight and original thought based on what you learned, and tell your personal story. Caution: Do not over-criticize the profession.
If you can, try to incorporate warmth and feeling into your essay so that the reader is able to tell that you are a compassionate, caring person. Remember, this is a statement about you: therefore it is okay to use the word “I” and to keep the focus on you. Do not provide so much detail that YOU get lost in the essay. The essay should also show your sense of humanity so that admissions officers see you as someone who would be valuable not only to the medical profession, but to their institution as well. Think of writing this essay as if you were writing a newspaper article in the sense that you want to answer the “who, what, when, where, why, and how” of you and your journey into medicine.
The following are some ideas that might help you get started in brainstorming/writing your personal statement:
- What is your first recollection about medicine? What was your reaction to it? Or, what was your first experience dealing with some serious health-related dilemma (a parent diagnosed with cancer, etc.)?
- Who do you know who is in medicine? What do you like, respect, admire about that person?
- Why do you want to be a physician? Why not something else?
- Who is your role model and why? What have you learned from this person?
- What is the most memorable experience you had in the medical profession?
- I’m the dean of the school—why should I let you in?
- What are two things about you that make you different from anyone else you know?
- When did you discover your interest in the medical field?
- Why are you interested in medicine?
- What academic strengths do you possess? For example: above-average grades, leadership roles in specific courses, teaching assistant/lab assistant experience, tutoring.
- Are there some extraordinary circumstances that may need to be discussed? For example: your grades suffered in a particular semester/year because of a demanding work schedule, illness, or family problems. Before you venture down these roads please speak to your advisor or a professor as we may be able to address these issues more safely in our letter.
- What honors/awards have you received? For example: scholarships, awards bestowed by an organization of which you are a member, recognition for work in the community, the dean’s list, honors.
- What research activities have you participated in? For example: research assistant, slide prep, data entry/analysis, and survey development/administration.
- What extracurricular activities have you participated in? For example: membership/office in a campus organization, membership/office in a professional/ community organization.
- What volunteer experience do you have?
- What relevant work experience do you have?
- What specific areas of interest do you have within the health field?
- Why will you make a strong addition to this program? What strengths do you bring with you?
- What are your career goals once you complete your education?
- Have you had meaningful life experiences: jobs, travel, Peace Corps., that would make you stand out from the rest?
**Make a list of all the information you want the admissions committee to have about you. Organize the items on your list into groups of ideas that seem to fit together naturally.
Write when you write and edit when you edit! Your first draft should be straight from the heart, brutally honest, and inclusive of all the information you think will be useful to the admissions committee; you can edit later.
Do not just write what you think they want to read. If you do this, it will sound too contrived and give the impression that all you want to do is impress them, not express yourself and who you are.
Speak from your heart; trying to convey an honest representation of who you are is the best policy. You can’t fabricate a person who does not exist, nor is this the type of person they would want to admit to their institution!
A personal statement should be a reflection of your personality. By reading your personal statement the admissions committee should be able to develop a better understanding of you. An effective essay lets the reader know you would be an interesting person to interview and potentially a valuable addition to the institution. They may also go to your personal statement when reviewing your application to get an overall sense of you as an applicant. Be sure it functions as the “glue” that brings all aspects of your application together into a cohesive application.
Consider the readers of your application. Admissions committees are made up of persons who are proud to be associated with the profession, and are the gatekeepers of the profession. Do not overly criticize them, their professions, or the health industry. If you feel like you must point out some flaw you have discovered in your journey and that flaw is perhaps why you want to join the profession, make this statement in a way that makes it sound more like an inspiration or motivation and not a criticism or critique of the profession or health system. Also keep in mind that non-science minded people may read your essay. Avoid being too technical and scientifically-wordy when writing about YOU.
No whining and no excuses—do not write a laundry list of personal problems. The essay should be upbeat, illustrating how you have turned adversity to strength and/or pain/sorrow into motivation. An explanation is always better than an excuse and owning up to your own contribution to academic problems is a better way to go than blaming someone else or not taking ownership of what you did to contribute to a problem. Avoid the unusual, at least in the presentation of your essay. A personal statement in the form of a ceramic yucca or haiku is not a good idea.
Be specific and provide details. Your details and experiences are what make your personal statement unique and will impress the reader. Document your conclusions with examples and do not make general, far-reaching statements.
Do not laundry list your accomplishments and experiences without addressing how those experiences helped you determine your career objective or helped you to better understand yourself and your role as a potential healthcare provider. Otherwise, your list will not only be similar to your resume and what your evaluators write about you, but it will also make you appear egotistical. Everything in your personal statement should have a reason for being included. Formulate conclusions that reflect the meaningfulness of your experiences.
Be prepared to write several drafts and get an early start. Waiting until the last minute is never a good idea and will give you a personal statement which might be good, but could definitely be better and more refined. After you have written your statement, set it aside for at least a day or two and then revisit it. When you read it again, you may be in a different frame of mind and will be ready to revise.
Organize your ideas logically. Many personal statements are organized chronologically. Other statements are organized by topic (e.g. history, academic background, experience, and community service) or by theme or thesis (e.g. what will make a good healthcare professional in the year 2010 and how/why you would be that person). Whatever style you choose, it is imperative that you provide the reader with some reference points so that s/he does not have to spend time sorting out your information.
Set the proper tone. Remember that this is your chance for them to know you more personally and you should take full advantage of this opportunity. Try to avoid the use of clichés, slang and/or sentences or phrases that give a conversational or chatty tone to your essay. Remember: you are writing for professionals, so be professional in your choice of words and sentence structure.
Do not try to be clever or humorous unless you are absolutely certain you can pull it off with finesse. An application to medical school is serious business and an admissions reader is not going to want to admit someone who does not seem serious about medicine. Keep it professional.
Use the active voice. Put the spotlight on you rather than on someone or something else. (Weak: I was employed by the hospital to assist… Better: I assisted in the examination of…)
Watch for sentence fragments, run-on sentences, dangling phrases or ideas, and the occasional random tangents.
Use action-packed, descriptive verbs and be careful not to switch tenses. Avoid ending sentences with a preposition (e.g. with, of).
Do not be unnecessarily wordy. (Weak: After the course was finished, I was sure that I wanted to spend my entire life in daily contact with the world of medicine.
Better: That course convinced me my future was in medicine.)
Make sure your statement is organized and avoid redundancy. If it is too long or rambling, it will appear undisciplined, out of focus, and unrefined.
When using acronyms, give the entire name when it first appears followed by the acronym in parentheses.
Have several people review your draft—friends, family, faculty, and staff. They may know some things that you omitted, and may be more objective and give you an honest opinion of how you are coming across.
This is an exercise in perfection. Poor grammar, spelling, punctuation, and incomplete sentences are not acceptable under any circumstances and will weaken your application.
Sample Personal Statements (Medical School)
Sample Personal Statements (Podiatric/Optometric School)
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